I wrote this poem when I was attending a creative writing course in 2013. It was at this time that I learnt about different types of poems and editing. It was my first (and only!) attempt at a Villanelle style of poem. Most of my poems have been written spontaneously and rarely edited. I’d love to know what you think.
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OBLIVION
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Across the trapway looming dwellings queue
I struggle with thoughts of others’ feeling
Shimmering isle inspired by blue depth hue
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Eery emptiness fakes tempting trespass
I’m drawn to chance the shake of such stepping
Across the trapway looming dwellings queue
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Furtive steps melt along the curving path
I feel the heat of the orange glowing
Shimmering isle inspired by blue depth hue
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Hidden echoes of the privileged few
I hear aching voices softly calling
Across the tramway looming dwellings queue
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Tippling boats and boys seared by rich sun rays
I bless them from the heart for such dreaming
Shimmering isle inspired by blue depth hue
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Shedding golden light on secret ways
I feel lured in by those that went sailing
Across the tramway looming dwellings queue
Shimmering isle inspired by blue depth hue